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Chapter 1: Rising Above (Just a little bit of it)

31.1k Spikerya  8.7 years ago

Chapter 1:
Rise Above

    BARK! A portal opened up and sucked Karson into its clutching grasp. "Ahhhh......".


  Waking up on the gassy forest ground was something that Karson was not used to. But  you could argue that the day he had just had wasn’t normal either. Looking around      himself as best he could, he could definitely tell he was in a forest-type biome.      Another thing he noticed was an extra shimmer in the night sky, and upon standing up,  he realized he was in a biosphere of sorts. The modern biosphere that he knew was       invented in 2020. But this was 2035 and they were still not popular enough to be this  gigantic. He estimated it to be about 10 football fields in diameter. Looking around   this much was making him dizzy so he walked over to a nearby tree and propped himself  against the rough bark to steady himself. Looking up directly in front of him he saw a glowing symbol that looked like a trident mixed with a lightning bolt, imbedded in the tree’s trunk. CHA-CHIK. zzzzzzzZZZZZZ. The sound of a laser rifle being powered up     behind him paralyzed any movement he made. “Put your hands where I can see them and    turn around!”. Hearing this order he immediately turned around, terrified, and looked  directly at the man behind him. Karson stuttered, “What are you going to do to me?”.   The strangely uniformed man replied, “I’m taking you to MB until further notice. Now   move!”. Grabbing hold of Karson’s wrists and pushing him in a westwardly direction, the uniformed man marched Karson for about an hour, until they reached a huge steel door. The man went to a side panel and swiped a card he had on the panel. A light turned     green and the door slid open to reveal a lab of sorts. Marching through the lab, Karson was lead to another, smaller door, which slid open when they got close and the man    marched him through it into an aircraft bay, where Karson saw vehicles he did not      recognize from the crowded city streets or from the air shows he attended.
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    No bad! Keep at it and with some polishing up it can be great

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    41.5k MrVaultech

    Could use some work, but otherwise really good.

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    57.1k bjac0

    @Spikerya not bad...

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    31.1k Spikerya

    @Supercraft888 @MrVaultech

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    31.1k Spikerya

    @bjac0 kk back how about the start now...

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    31.1k Spikerya

    @bjac0 i have an idea, brb lol

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    57.1k bjac0

    @Spikerya interesting, but at the start, it doesn't get a reader into the mood of the story, at the start of ep one of "Northern Lights" it had north korean kids singing songs of destroying the US and then it's connection cut off, it(hopefully) got readers into the mood of the story.

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    31.1k Spikerya

    @bjac0

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