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Hi
Um well here it is
The girl with the greasy hair
Running, running through a dark misty forest,
Running away from her demons, her shadow and her ghost a ghost of her former self,
The girl with that dark greasy hair,
She looks behind her to see her demons, her sadness that hid within, it drew close,
The bullies are nigh, very close indeed
Her breath, was now coming in short ragged gasps, always running, running from the bullies, running from her former self
She made the decision to jump, dive, fall, spin and reel down wards, three , down, two, down further still, one , splosh,
She crawled and scrambled up the sand and shale, in the water she saw
The beauty that lay within
She didn’t care how she looked, on the outside she was just the girl with the dark greasy hair, but within, is where the true beauty lay, her will to live and survive, through the resentment she was served and through the pain.
Now her life ebbing away, there was one boy who cried, tear drops dripping like rain, down onto her cheeks, she was the dark haired girl.
Lol I don’t butcher meat but I’m pretty good a butchering character poems or at least making horrible ones
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The girl with greasy hair
Running, running to the shower
ok I will keep that in mind for next time XD, thank you for the upvote! :D @RailfanEthan
not bad, but you gotta try using terms that isn't literal. So instead of saying bullies, rewrite it as something scary, like a dragon. It could look like this:
She always was aware
That some day the ravenous dragons lured
Some breathe fire upon her
Some saw her ran, but today
Today was different
She drew forth her sword,
And never saw the dragons again
And could carry on a normal day
For the dragons were expelled