I decided to make a creepy pasta posting site if you dont no what it is its basically wierd or scary made up (or real if it happened) stories. Pls be truthful if its not true but heres one to start us off:
One day i was flying my really fast jet when i decided to turn right after taking off from wright. I continued to fly until i sign came up saying you have found the andoned island. I was really creeped out cuz id never heard of it but i continued to fly and i got real foggy. I eventually saw a landing strip so i landed and it said you have discoverd the crash flight strip. No idea why. I went into the editor grabbed a nice offroad vehicle and explored. I came across a big factory and i sign came up saying check editor so i went in to find all sorts of new parts and... a time machine parts i put that on set the date for the beginning of kraboabloa and flew there and it was dark and alas! The volcano was erupting! I saw all sorts of targetable creatures but then my game crashed. I reloaded it and respawned to find my world and the editor back to normal except this one thing a giant creature was in the now dormant volcano and shot insanley fast missioes at me anytime i got near itbwas really wierd i contacted jundroo and told them my story but they said im making things up and that they never implemented that (or maby they didnt hint hint) thats all for now bye. P.S. this story is not real.
Jesus Christ me from 3 years ago was extremely cringe.
Ok so I was playing and I dropped bombs on bandit airport I blew up cuz cargo bay didnt open and message pop up ye have made a grave mistake
@Awsomur Ah I see now. I have issues with getting mad at people easily, so I see that you can get carried away.
Again, I’m really sorry for being so harsh. I can understand the small keyboard thing, I’ve used plenty of tiny devices in my life.
@12705129
Im a little bit hurt but i understand the criticism but it wasnt about grammar this is about the story it self
Sorry im on Android and the buttons are small
Who else wants to see a wolcano expload?
My statement about cringe might have seemed a little rude, and for that I apologize. I have a real problem with that. Now I’m not particularly good at story writing either, but I will give you some honest criticism:
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The amount of typos and misspelled words really is what kills this story right off the bat. “Wolcano” is really what made me cringe. I’m sure you know how to write properly, but it really seems like this was written in a rush and never proofread. And although I’m not sure what exactly you wrote this on it seems like the keyboard may have been fighting you while typing.
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The idea of the story is really cool, but it needs to be longer and split into multiple paragraphs so it’s easier to read and follow. “That’s all for now bye” is not a great way to end a story that’s supposed to be creepy.
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Again, sorry for being abrasive in my previous comment. I really hope this can help you to improve in your writing skills, because the concept here is really nice.
@12705129 @CrashFighter05
@Awsomur please try to be nice, and give constructive feedback.
Why thanks thank you can make one to rival it?
I’ve never cringed more in my entire life than when I read this