@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
It seems like handling the MDA battlefield alone is already complicated enough for you. How about letting me take over the Wright Island storyline? I can manage the pace.
@Graingy From my understanding as one of the players, it was merely paused. The reason is likely that many people were dissatisfied with the extensive RP at the time (though I believe a significant part of the reason was due to the other server, KE-RP).
However, only TUPL knows the exact reason.
Thanks to the support of the MDA and particularly the PEA, the enemy's current threat to Wright Island is not very significant. At present, we can basically handle the situation relying on our air force and air defense capabilities. More container trucks are heading to the outpost; they will be used to upgrade our defenses and to start constructing a dock. This may temporarily leave Wright Island in a vulnerable state, but it is a risk we need to take. *Please stay safe on your end as well. *
Over.
A very good article with excellent character development and philosophical themes. The only drawback is that the pacing of the story might be a bit slow, but that's my personal preference.
Feedback…"It was funny." The last sentence of the following paragraph.
Ironic it was how despite losing so much of what made him stand above others it was now more than ever impossible to hide how he did stand above still.
Please tell me what this long and complex sentence says within one second after reading it.
Today, we mourn the attacked outpost. Tomorrow, we will make the perpetrators pay! Antetus Alliance will not permit the invasion of our territory and waters. Be the supreme-quality soldiers! Our great nation is in national mourning. This shared loss makes us more united than ever! And our friends from the Scourge, for their shameful complicity in attacking the outpost, will Do! Their! Answer!
ask for P
赖特上空战火飘，我比天灾还要多。
飞得多，指挥乱，敌人一来打不了。
女鬼漂，指挥全，天灾一来，把它上市。
Warfare rages float over Wright, I outnumber the SCOURGE.
Fly too much,commands in chaos, when enemies come, we can't fight.
Female Wraith drifts, command intact,when the SCOURGE arrives, let them 上市.
A question: Do they need airports?
To be honest, the current Antetus Alliance is both suited and struggling to counter them, because advanced FT missiles are not cheap. If they had airports, the LF-12A would make them understand the core of air superiority theory. But...
... Perhaps that experimental project needs to be launched ahead of schedule.
@SPWithLizzie @BOSSentinel First, I want to confirm the event—Bos, because 444 did not follow his instructions within the specified time, carried out the strike as threatened using a private company's vessel carrying a large number of civilians. However, the intensity of the strike was too extreme, or the action itself was too radical, which provoked dissatisfaction from others. The situation even escalated to the point of threatening to blow up the vessel, and then it fell into the dilemma of how to define this vessel. Is that correct?
@SPWithLizzie @MetallicBeef6572 @BOSSentinel Sorry, but regarding the "paramilitary organization," I have some thoughts, so I would like to request permission to join the discussion. If anyone disagrees, I will withdraw.
Bro, you did a pretty good job. It would be even better if the bullet trajectory could be optimized (or maybe this is a unique feature? Since it’s hard to predict).
Bro ended up like this largely due to a lack of experience. When others condemn you from the moral high ground, the important thing is not to refute them but to seize the high ground yourself.
For example, in another RP: M-War II, I got into a heated argument with a participant who was competing with me for Wright Island. When I threatened to attack the military port with anti-ship missiles:
He: "We are hosting a routine festival on our warships—you would be attacking civilians!"
Me: "The cunning enemy is using civilians as human shields."
Interesting Antetus Alliance real-name observation of the battle, can you add me as an audience in the subsequent content?
@AviationLoverGEEK444 @BOSSentinel (wish you remember me) @MetallicBeef6572
@SilverTheDogfighter Antetus Alliance is my country
south wright, Antetus Alliance, Second Experimental Outpost.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover thanks bro!
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover Bro, can I use your red series? I want to film a scrapped plot from TSW.
Happy birthday! 🍰
Excellent idea bro, it only needs a few tiny little adjustments to become practical, and I already have a solution ready.
@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
+1@Graingy For absurd: Art of the Absurd, Absurdist Art
@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
+1I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
+1The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
+1Congratulation for 100k!
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover … Bro, I thought you lost the plane..That's a pretty cool idea.
+1bro what's happened?
+1It seems like handling the MDA battlefield alone is already complicated enough for you. How about letting me take over the Wright Island storyline? I can manage the pace.
+1@Graingy this one
@Graingy From my understanding as one of the players, it was merely paused. The reason is likely that many people were dissatisfied with the extensive RP at the time (though I believe a significant part of the reason was due to the other server, KE-RP).
+1However, only TUPL knows the exact reason.
Thanks to the support of the MDA and particularly the PEA, the enemy's current threat to Wright Island is not very significant. At present, we can basically handle the situation relying on our air force and air defense capabilities. More container trucks are heading to the outpost; they will be used to upgrade our defenses and to start constructing a dock. This may temporarily leave Wright Island in a vulnerable state, but it is a risk we need to take.
+1*Please stay safe on your end as well. *
Over.
… I can't find this plane on your homepage, which is strange.
A very good article with excellent character development and philosophical themes. The only drawback is that the pacing of the story might be a bit slow, but that's my personal preference.
Feedback…"It was funny." The last sentence of the following paragraph.
Ironic it was how despite losing so much of what made him stand above others it was now more than ever impossible to hide how he did stand above still.
Please tell me what this long and complex sentence says within one second after reading it.
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover em… After some reflection, I want to emphasize that my question is We will conduct a landing operation against them.
Today, we mourn the attacked outpost. Tomorrow, we will make the perpetrators pay! Antetus Alliance will not permit the invasion of our territory and waters. Be the supreme-quality soldiers! Our great nation is in national mourning. This shared loss makes us more united than ever! And our friends from the Scourge, for their shameful complicity in attacking the outpost, will Do! Their! Answer!
+1ask for P
I am writing my opening article. How much time do we have left before we start?
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover Understood, I now have a new idea.
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover I have a question now—since it's a mobile island, will we need to conduct an amphibious assault in the future?
@TheUltimatePlaneLover "They may however bring ships or amphibious vehicles."
what ship?
赖特上空战火飘，我比天灾还要多。
+2飞得多，指挥乱，敌人一来打不了。
女鬼漂，指挥全，天灾一来，把它上市。
Warfare rages float over Wright, I outnumber the SCOURGE.
Fly too much,commands in chaos, when enemies come, we can't fight.
Female Wraith drifts, command intact,when the SCOURGE arrives, let them 上市.
@SuperSuperTheSylph I am fine, thanks
+1Battling with FT code and bugs.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover ok, so
Project Aurelia
A question: Do they need airports?
To be honest, the current Antetus Alliance is both suited and struggling to counter them, because advanced FT missiles are not cheap. If they had airports, the LF-12A would make them understand the core of air superiority theory. But...
...
Perhaps that experimental project needs to be launched ahead of schedule.
@CenturyAerospace Good point
Since there are some heavily modified missiles or some FT missiles in SP1, I wonder if this will have an impact in the multiplayer mode of SP2.
@KPLBall Original challenge? Which?
Anyway, I think I will join
so what is it?
@SPWithLizzie @BOSSentinel First, I want to confirm the event—Bos, because 444 did not follow his instructions within the specified time, carried out the strike as threatened using a private company's vessel carrying a large number of civilians. However, the intensity of the strike was too extreme, or the action itself was too radical, which provoked dissatisfaction from others. The situation even escalated to the point of threatening to blow up the vessel, and then it fell into the dilemma of how to define this vessel. Is that correct?
@SPWithLizzie @MetallicBeef6572 @BOSSentinel Sorry, but regarding the "paramilitary organization," I have some thoughts, so I would like to request permission to join the discussion. If anyone disagrees, I will withdraw.
what improve do you want
Bro, you did a pretty good job. It would be even better if the bullet trajectory could be optimized (or maybe this is a unique feature? Since it’s hard to predict).
@SPWithLizzie sorry, I will just watch
+1@SPWithLizzie Little tips not about being cool, but about practical stuff.
The versatility of this method goes far beyond RP.
Bro ended up like this largely due to a lack of experience. When others condemn you from the moral high ground, the important thing is not to refute them but to seize the high ground yourself.
For example, in another RP: M-War II, I got into a heated argument with a participant who was competing with me for Wright Island. When I threatened to attack the military port with anti-ship missiles:
He: "We are hosting a routine festival on our warships—you would be attacking civilians!"
Me: "The cunning enemy is using civilians as human shields."
@SPWithLizzie I feel like♡
And for that person who agreed with you saying
@SPWithLizzie important?
Well done, bro.
+1If possible, you can try the proportional navigation method or the parallel approach method.
@AviationLoverGEEK444 I want to be an audience.
@MetallicBeef6572 just audience
Interesting
+2Antetus Alliance real-name observation of the battle, can you add me as an audience in the subsequent content?
@AviationLoverGEEK444 @BOSSentinel (wish you remember me) @MetallicBeef6572
bro just made War II 🤣
Bro, it feels like I'm flying a MiG-27, and the game crashed because I fired for too long. 💀
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover
+1