@TheUltimatePlaneLover This issue will be considered in Phase II under "How to Conduct Maritime Interception," and it will also be the most challenging aspect of the entire war.
However, there is an option to skip Phase II and integrate it with Phase III.
I have no objections—this is a perfect story.
However, I've been thinking: could there be some foreshadowing for the path in the cornfield earlier in the text?
@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
It seems like handling the MDA battlefield alone is already complicated enough for you. How about letting me take over the Wright Island storyline? I can manage the pace.
@Graingy From my understanding as one of the players, it was merely paused. The reason is likely that many people were dissatisfied with the extensive RP at the time (though I believe a significant part of the reason was due to the other server, KE-RP).
However, only TUPL knows the exact reason.
Thanks to the support of the MDA and particularly the PEA, the enemy's current threat to Wright Island is not very significant. At present, we can basically handle the situation relying on our air force and air defense capabilities. More container trucks are heading to the outpost; they will be used to upgrade our defenses and to start constructing a dock. This may temporarily leave Wright Island in a vulnerable state, but it is a risk we need to take. *Please stay safe on your end as well. *
Over.
A very good article with excellent character development and philosophical themes. The only drawback is that the pacing of the story might be a bit slow, but that's my personal preference.
Feedback…"It was funny." The last sentence of the following paragraph.
Ironic it was how despite losing so much of what made him stand above others it was now more than ever impossible to hide how he did stand above still.
Please tell me what this long and complex sentence says within one second after reading it.
Today, we mourn the attacked outpost. Tomorrow, we will make the perpetrators pay! Antetus Alliance will not permit the invasion of our territory and waters. Be the supreme-quality soldiers! Our great nation is in national mourning. This shared loss makes us more united than ever! And our friends from the Scourge, for their shameful complicity in attacking the outpost, will Do! Their! Answer!
ask for P
Hmm… I don't really get the request… but at least it's before the deadline, so I'll give it a shot.
Speaking of which, TUPL is dropping the A40s… What a shame, my work will probably still be a "T-3" — after all, the T-3 is essentially just existing weapons cobbled together.
But can I really finish everything from theory to practice by July…
I don't quite understand your request. Are you saying that there are too many RP war posts themselves, or that a large number of RP war posts have not appeared in the section they should be in? Because I can't think of anyone who would ask questions in the RP section. Planes/posts related to SimplePlanes roleplay such as wars.
Obviously, there are two people here who have chosen to commit crimes against humanity
·War Crime
Article 8(2)(c)(i) of the Rome Statute
explicitly prohibits "torture or inhuman treatment" regardless of the victim's combatant status.
→ Even if targeting insurgents, acts of torture remain unlawful.
·Crime Against Humanity
If the torture is systematic or widespread (e.g., a public declaration to "eradicate them in the cruelest ways"), it may violate Article 7(1)(f) of the Rome Statute (torture as a crime against humanity).
@TheUltimatePlaneLover em… It may indeed be effective, although the QY-11A has a cruising altitude of 15 meters and will not collide with it, there is still a slight possibility of machine gun interception. After all, the QY-11A subsonic missile was designed without considering breakthrough capability.
@TheUltimatePlaneLover I'm not sure if it can change the course of the war, but at least I'm certain of one thing- The code name for anti-ship missiles should be HL (Like HL-1A on NS-1A)
bro, you put the cockpit at the bottom of the ship??!
I said why couldn't I find you during my missile test, it turned out you were submerged in water.
It looks very good, but...
bro, your side air defense looks much more complex than the main air defense. Is it because you converted the coordinate system to prevent errors caused by misalignment of the coordinate system in the self aiming program?
@SuperSuperTheSylph There's no way, if the missile body is too thin, it's difficult to trigger the close range explosion
At least I don't know how to handle it
@UnitedinOne90XCVBNKA At present, it is air to sea and requires some modifications to become sea to sea
Damn it, I forgot to mark here that this is an anti-ship missile
@TheUltimatePlaneLover The trigger condition for Phase III is steadily tracking the enemy island.
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover This issue will be considered in Phase II under "How to Conduct Maritime Interception," and it will also be the most challenging aspect of the entire war.
+1However, there is an option to skip Phase II and integrate it with Phase III.
I have no objections—this is a perfect story.
+1However, I've been thinking: could there be some foreshadowing for the path in the cornfield earlier in the text?
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+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover thanks bro!
+1@Graingy ...Don't get hung up on this. Just remember it's a positive term, and I'll use "interesting" instead from now on.
Bro, as I said from the beginning, this is a superhero fantasy—I know what you're trying to write. Your comments were just supplementary explanations, and I understand you just wanted to draw people's attention to this superhuman.
But— I suggest you first make sure your writing reflects that intent. There's a serious disconnect between your core theme and the actual narrative.
"If it looks like a duck, swims like a duck, and quacks like a duck, then it is a duck."
You argue that she isn’t human, so she shouldn’t be lumped together with human dictators. Fair enough—human monarchs historically claimed "divine right" to legitimize their power. But you’ve simply brought the divine down to earth to justify centralized authority. In my view, there’s no real difference—you’ve just written out the ultimate fantasy of an absolute ruler. That’s nothing new.
Yes, I know that’s not what you intended—but intent isn’t everything. You can’t fully control how it’s perceived. Throughout human cultural history, the only reference we have for a state ruled by a single being of extraordinary power is absolute monarchy. The "superhuman" aspect is just a surface-level setting. What truly matters is how she’s portrayed. Take Star Wars—it’s sci-fi, but at its core, isn’t it just a story built around melee combat? You didn’t actually break away from centralized authoritarianism in your narrative, nor did you emphasize her truly transcendent qualities beyond human history. In essence, you unconsciously defaulted to the most convenient template: autocratic monarchy. Changing the outer shell doesn’t alter the core.
To be blunt, the issue really boils down to this: "Your current skill level isn’t yet a match for your ideas." But ironically, that’s what makes the whole story… "interesting." Thanks for your dedication to the art, but if your story needs a manual to be understood—maybe it’s time to go back to the drawing board.
+1@Graingy I'm very sorry, but my translator had a serious issue—the meaning of the last sentence was not what it appeared to be.
+1I just found it amusing that a "tsar" emerged in the Soviet Union. Clearly, he fits perfectly into your theme of absurdity, which is what I intended to praise, not criticize.
I don’t know what might have upset you, but what has interested me from the beginning is solely the absurdity of the entire story, not any political stance. Your comment has only heightened this absurdity, please allow me to elaborate on it in a piece of writing.
@Graingy Oh, then you must be an outstanding researcher.
+1The West has its performance-based governance, while China emphasizes the importance of connecting with the grassroots to win people's hearts. Isolated in the Kremlin, purging treacherous officials, maintaining good relations with subordinates, and single-handedly making the government efficient and clean—this almost divine presence. Apart from the Russians, I can't think of anyone else who could portray such a strong tsarist vibe.
A joke: the surface setting of this story is the New Soviet Union.
A very interesting story.
To be honest, at first, I didn’t quite understand what the story was about. Later, I realized that although it wears a Soviet exterior, it actually discusses the contrast between the appearance of a superman and his friendly inner self, while incorporating some absurd elements. In terms of writing, the character relationships are well-handled, the atmosphere is effectively built, and the details are rich.
Feedback? To be honest, it’s similar to the previous story—the beginning is a bit boring. I can understand that this is a slow-burn approach, focusing first on the environment, then the guards chatting, the office, and so on. Honestly, the atmosphere-building is quite good, but… I suppose I just don’t enjoy seeing this. This might be my issue, as I don’t read much serious literature. The core of the story doesn’t emerge until the door-blocking incident later on. I’m not sure how many people on this website would read that far.
As for suggestions… Well, if it were me, I’d try it in the style of Chinese web novels—placing the door-blocking incident at the very beginning. As the core event, it could effectively create suspense—why would someone do this?—and grab the reader’s attention. Then, the world-building information could be gradually revealed or inserted at appropriate moments. I think this would make the story more dramatic. But obviously, it would ruin the carefully crafted atmosphere and lose the intended feel, so I doubt you’d like it.
Ah, of course, I’m more interested in something else—you mentioned that political discussions are not allowed. I guess you might be referring to things related to the Soviet Union, among others. To be honest, after careful study, I know you intended to write about a superman-like character, but what came out seems even stranger… Of course, I can’t say for sure, but I have a good way to verify—Russian?
+1Congratulation for 100k!
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover … Bro, I thought you lost the plane..That's a pretty cool idea.
+1bro what's happened?
+1It seems like handling the MDA battlefield alone is already complicated enough for you. How about letting me take over the Wright Island storyline? I can manage the pace.
+1@Graingy From my understanding as one of the players, it was merely paused. The reason is likely that many people were dissatisfied with the extensive RP at the time (though I believe a significant part of the reason was due to the other server, KE-RP).
+1However, only TUPL knows the exact reason.
Thanks to the support of the MDA and particularly the PEA, the enemy's current threat to Wright Island is not very significant. At present, we can basically handle the situation relying on our air force and air defense capabilities. More container trucks are heading to the outpost; they will be used to upgrade our defenses and to start constructing a dock. This may temporarily leave Wright Island in a vulnerable state, but it is a risk we need to take.
+1*Please stay safe on your end as well. *
Over.
A very good article with excellent character development and philosophical themes. The only drawback is that the pacing of the story might be a bit slow, but that's my personal preference.
Feedback…"It was funny." The last sentence of the following paragraph.
Ironic it was how despite losing so much of what made him stand above others it was now more than ever impossible to hide how he did stand above still.
Please tell me what this long and complex sentence says within one second after reading it.
+1Today, we mourn the attacked outpost. Tomorrow, we will make the perpetrators pay! Antetus Alliance will not permit the invasion of our territory and waters. Be the supreme-quality soldiers! Our great nation is in national mourning. This shared loss makes us more united than ever! And our friends from the Scourge, for their shameful complicity in attacking the outpost, will Do! Their! Answer!
+1ask for P
I am writing my opening article. How much time do we have left before we start?
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover Understood, I now have a new idea.
+1@SuperSuperTheSylph I am fine, thanks
+1Battling with FT code and bugs.
@SPWithLizzie sorry, I will just watch
+1Well done, bro.
+1If possible, you can try the proportional navigation method or the parallel approach method.
Bro, it feels like I'm flying a MiG-27, and the game crashed because I fired for too long. 💀
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover
+1Hmm… I don't really get the request… but at least it's before the deadline, so I'll give it a shot.
+1Speaking of which, TUPL is dropping the A40s… What a shame, my work will probably still be a "T-3" — after all, the T-3 is essentially just existing weapons cobbled together.
But can I really finish everything from theory to practice by July…
@RarelyCyber That's you!
Welcome back!
+1Happy Birthday 🍰
+1Welcome back, bro!
+1I'm behind your idea; after all, I'm currently specializing in the Funky Tree missile myself.
I don't quite understand your request. Are you saying that there are too many RP war posts themselves, or that a large number of RP war posts have not appeared in the section they should be in? Because I can't think of anyone who would ask questions in the RP section.
+1Planes/posts related to SimplePlanes roleplay such as wars.
@Graingy ?
+1@Christiant2 His Wright City has nothing to do with us
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover bro look at my idea
+1@Lake (Provzolovia - Loyalist)
+1-@Bugati87 (BBU - Neutral)
-@GeneralCorpInc (GCI - Neutral)
Obviously, there are two people here who have chosen to commit crimes against humanity
+1·War Crime
Article 8(2)(c)(i) of the Rome Statute
explicitly prohibits "torture or inhuman treatment" regardless of the victim's combatant status.
→ Even if targeting insurgents, acts of torture remain unlawful.
·Crime Against Humanity
If the torture is systematic or widespread (e.g., a public declaration to "eradicate them in the cruelest ways"), it may violate Article 7(1)(f) of the Rome Statute (torture as a crime against humanity).
@TheUltimatePlaneLover em… It may indeed be effective, although the QY-11A has a cruising altitude of 15 meters and will not collide with it, there is still a slight possibility of machine gun interception.
+1After all, the QY-11A subsonic missile was designed without considering breakthrough capability.
em… "TRASH" rafts? What is it?
+1@TheUltimatePlaneLover I'm not sure if it can change the course of the war, but at least I'm certain of one thing- The code name for anti-ship missiles should be HL (Like HL-1A on NS-1A)
+1-@Lake (Provzolovia - Loyalist)
+1-@Bugati87 (BBU - Neutral)
-@GeneralCorpInc (GCI - Neutral)
Even if we are allies of convenience,you remain a valued friend. We will honor our mutual defense obligations.
+1You are our most critical naval asset at present - I will coordinate fully with your operations. You now have authorization to directly request APLA air-launched anti-ship strikes.
@SuperSuperTheSylph It's just a mischievous kid, ignore him.
+1@RB107
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You're a bit extreme, to be honest
+1bro, you put the cockpit at the bottom of the ship??!
+1I said why couldn't I find you during my missile test, it turned out you were submerged in water.
It looks very good, but...
+1bro, your side air defense looks much more complex than the main air defense. Is it because you converted the coordinate system to prevent errors caused by misalignment of the coordinate system in the self aiming program?
@SuperSuperTheSylph There's no way, if the missile body is too thin, it's difficult to trigger the close range explosion
+1At least I don't know how to handle it
@SuperSuperTheSylph ?
+1@JaxHere (MDA - Loyalist)
+1-@LunarEclipseSP (Snowstone - Loyalist)
-@UnitedinOne90XCVBNKA (URSC - Loyalist)
@TheMouse (MDA Leader - Loyalist)
+1-@Monarchii (The Monarchii - Loyalist)
@SamuelJamesCastor (Snowstone - Loyalist)
@TheUltimatePlaneLover
+1@UnitedinOne90XCVBNKA At present, it is air to sea and requires some modifications to become sea to sea
+1Damn it, I forgot to mark here that this is an anti-ship missile
@UnitedinOne90XCVBNKA ?
+1I don't understand English terminology